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June 5, 2005
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there has been a girl
who had it up to here
she was annoyed with anything
and was drinking too much beer

then there was a boy
whose live was neither easy
and every day he got up well
he ended being dizzy

life had been a bully
to both of them so far
the only thing it spared for them
was an enourmous, visible scar

they never saw each other
and maybe never will
though there is something special
and that is both their skill

the love for art connects them
helps them through their lifes
though the distance cuts them
deepest like some knifes

yet so far they seem so close
making it through their days
and living to give each other strength
in most peculiar ways

I wonder what may happen next
when they maybe meet
I guess at least, for a start
there would be a treat

the life goes on for you and me
here the story ends
just like in all the cinemas
now the story blends
:icona1fie:
It started out with the first paragraph while heading for the train. There I opened my laptop and started writing down, not knowing what would it turn into. I just knew what the next paragraph would look like, I knew she needed a counter part. From there I got this rough line in my head and it simply evolved. Some part even shifted around a bit while writing...

I hope you like it. I know at least that I do.

[Edit] -- sorry for the updates, I needed to fix some typos...
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:iconmurtletheturtle:
couple of typos but other than that WELL DONE, i really like this, it was really amazing to read :D i congratulate you on your wonderful poem :clap:
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:iconmeic2:
Very interesting narrative work ... held my interest to the end!
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:icona1fie:
Thank you so much... :hug:
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:iconmeic2:
You're welcome :)
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:iconalishahsila:
Beautiful.........
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:icona1fie:
Thank you. :hug:
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:iconalishahsila:
You're welcome my dear....
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:iconpinkpanthress:
Das ist so was von schön.
Lese ich da etwa Semi-Biographie raus?
Ich wusste doch das es beid Dir nicht lange dauert, bis ich ein schönes :+fav: finde...
Trés Parfait... :clap:
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:icona1fie:
Danke. :blushes: Und nochmal danke fürs :+fav:, bedeutet mir viel, dass es so gut ankommt.
Semi-Biographie? Naja, man schreibt in der Regel schon über Dinge, mit denen man sich zumindest teilweise identifizieren kann. Aber man sollte nicht zuviel hinein interpretieren... ;)
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:iconpinkpanthress:
Naaa.
So meinte ich es nicht. Es liest sich nur so als wenn der Schreiber es teils ein bisschen selbst so fühlt.
Sorry :blush:
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